Here is a great example of a From the Brain paragraph from thirteen-year-old Margaret. She’s a natural at tight, focused paragraphs. This paragraph was from Margaret’s free-write journal.

I dance. I do many types of dancing: ballet, jazz, tap, and modern. My favorite type is probably ballet or modern. Two years ago, I bought my pointe shoes and have gone through about seven pairs since. I have gone through so many of them because I have very high arches which bend the shank of the shoe, the bottom of the shoe, extremely fast. The fastest time I have gone through a single pair is two weeks! Thankfully, jazz, modern, and tap are less expensive, otherwise my mom would probably not let me dance as much as I do now, or I would have to be a millionaire! Dance is a large part of my life, and I enjoy every moment of it.

Here is a delightful From the Brain paragraph from Brendan, age 12. From the Brain assignments teach students to write tight, focused paragraphs. With such a skill, students master the building block of all essays and reports.

I am a small country boy who once had a dream I was Captain America. Lying in my bed, I was awoken by a radiant ball of light. In a couple of seconds, it entered my body. Suddenly I felt my muscles bulging everywhere. I admired my new strength. I hopped out of bed, took a step, and ZIP! I flashed across my room. Super speed and super strength, not too shabby, I wondered to myself. Assuming I could fly, I jumped out the window. I plummeted towards the ground. A couple of yards away, I shot skywards. From that day on, I pledged to fight evil and protect civilians forever. I was Captain America!

before someone did a case study on me!

I have used a service called Wufoo to make my registration forms for my online email courses for years. Compared to some Wufoo users, I’m small beans and barely use half of what Wufoo offers, but what I do use is easy to manage and makes me look like a computer genius. (OK, all you REAL computer geeks out there, hush now!)

Just recently, I decided to make checklists for students to use when they upload their assignments. What a difference it has made! I was so excited about the results that I tweeted about it, and my message caught Wufoo-central’s eye. So they used my website contact form and asked to hear my Wufoo story.

Sixteen-year-old Joy took the Level 1 co-op class this year. The conclusion from her portfolio is a model example of a Level 1 Topic Sentence/Topic Clincher technique.

Update: She also clinched the title for this post.
;-)

Writing Foundations this year greatly improved my knowledge of grammar rules and helped me overcome some of my fears. Because the class provided a memorable way to learn grammar rules, I know so much more than I did when I started. The methods Miss Brekke used helped me to better understand the rules and why they are necessary. Therefore, I will always remember how to write an essay because of the fun example called the “essay burger.” In addition, my greatest challenge in this class was overcoming my fear of timed essays. It took a fair amount of work, but the things I have learned are worth it. In conclusion, Writing Foundations was an excellent way to invest my time because I learned many things about grammar, and I faced my greatest fear.

When I work with high school students in my writing classes, I see tangible improvements in grammar and punctuation usage. I see the ability to compose a paragraph come to life. I also see timed essays worth scores of 5 and 6 but for one thing: spelling errors galore.

Is it common for students to make great strides in grammar, punctuation, and other writing skills but still not be able to spell their way out of a wet paper bag? It certainly is. Spelling occurs in a specific part of the brain. Handwriting has its part, and composing (getting thoughts on paper) has its part. Structuring sentences, choosing words, using punctuation, typing, and so on, each use a different part of the brain. Insisting that the act of writing, including spelling, is one big skill that a kid can master simply by writing more is one of the worst forms of educational malpractice out there.

The most effective writing programs treat writing as a set of individual skills that eventually work together to put thoughts into words. The act of writing a simple story involves gathering ideas, breaking them down into separate groups and then sentences, putting them into a logical order, handwriting or typing words, putting the words in order, spelling them, adding punctuation, and so much more. The ability to do all of that at once is like commanding a rhetorical orchestra to perform. It’s like we have a little writing orchestra in our brains. Each skill that a writer uses is akin to a musician that plays a specific instrument. Together, the musicians create a moving symphony. Together, the individual writing skills create a story, a poem, an essay, or report. Just like each musician needs independent practice before playing with the whole group, a writer needs to practice different skills and techniques to perfect the parts that go into his story. To expect a whole orchestra to come together without such practice is absurd! It takes time and maturity for all those writing components to work in unison as well.

Because Writing Foundations trains those individual “musicians” with a variety of lessons and exercises throughout the year, handwriting, punctuation, sentence structure, vocabulary, and so on definitely improve. Writing Foundations doesn’t specifically address spelling skills, though. By the end of the year, spelling issues become the squeaky violin or crunchy cello in the third row.

Because most spelling programs are designed for elementary aged children, there is an unspoken assumption that the ability to spell should finally “be there” when a student reaches his teen years. That is actually another diabolical myth. Teenagers are chastised for being careless, lazy, or worse when they misspell words. But, just writing more doesn’t improve spelling skills. It doesn’t happen naturally from just reading more. Contrary to conventional wisdom, “just use spell check” doesn’t cut it, either. Despite all the spiffy apps out there, spell check is not always available, accurate, or even appropriate in some moments. Worst of all, a culture of ubiquitous text messages actually undermines a weak speller’s efforts to improve. If students, parents, and teachers are not aware of how a rhetorical orchestra truly grows, they might be tempted to despair.

Frequent spelling errors simply mean that the “spellist” in a writer’s mental orhcestra needs focused, independent practice outside of symphony hall for a time. The key is finding the right kind of practice for your student’s literary soloist. There are two crucial elements to look for. First, you need to know how your student’s brain works. There are various learning styles and lots of combinations, but when it comes to spelling issues, it basically boils down to your child’s strength in one of two areas: visual or auditory. Because spelling is mainly a visual activity, most workbook approaches for auditory learners do not work. Therefore, if your student has a profound auditory style, look for a program that has an audio component.

If your student has a strong visual learning style, a workbook approach will do fine, but only if it is designed properly, which leads to point number two. For all learning styles, an effective spelling curriculum needs to be built on phonics. The English language is founded on a code of phonetic rules, and the better one knows those rules, the better one can spell.

There are a plethora of wonderful phonetically based reading/spelling programs out there for primary students. Play-n-Talk is a timeless classic. Scaredy Cat Reading is solid, and the new All About Spelling through IEW has it all. However, for secondary students, it’s slim pickins for something that doesn’t insult a teenager’s intelligence. There are many remedial spelling programs out there, but most are designed by word families or frequency of misspelling rates which can end up being an aimless waste of time and money for some learners.

Throughout my career as a home schooling mother of seventeen years and a writing teacher of ten years, two spelling programs suitable for teens have risen to top of my list. One is ideal for strong visual learners, while the other works well for auditory learners and those whose strength lies in a combination of both learning styles.

For visual learners, I recommend Apples 1 Daily Spelling Drills and Apples 2 Daily Phonics Drills by Susan Kemmerer. The Apples workbooks introduce one spelling rule a week and give your student a variety of exercises in which to apply it. Kemmerer teaches students how to recognize when a word doesn’t “look right” and to fix it by applying the rule of the week. The lessons are simple but not juvenile, and they consistently include regular reviews of previous rules. Overall, Apples 1 and Apples 2 effectively give a student’s inner spellist the practice needed in about ten minutes a day.

For auditory or combination learners, I recommend IEW’s Excellence in Spelling program called The Phonetic Zoo. The Phonetic Zoo introduces spelling rules in a sequential manner that build towards more complex words as the student progresses. To begin a lesson, the student and teacher briefly talk about the rule before the student listens to the lesson on CD. During the lesson, the student practices spelling the words on paper and correcting the words as the CD directs. When a student achieves 100% success on the list of words for two days in a row, he moves on. Like Apples, The Phonetic Zoo lessons take only about ten minutes a day.

As students grow older, weak spelling skills will become more noticeable. This can happen even when a trail of spelling programs litters a teenager’s educational past. Even though spelling ability has nothing to do with intelligence levels or a student’s basic writing ability, it does affect ones reputation and sense of confidence. We now live in an electronically interconnected world of eternally preserved emails, blog posts, Facebook entries, and Twitter messages. Like a melodious or discordant performance, how students communicate in writing plants impressions in an audience’s mind. Writers cannot depend on a squiggly red line to conduct them. A solid foundation of phonics is crucial for students who want to successfully shine in today’s rhetorical symphonies.

It’s portfolio time of year again where students create a scrapbook of their best work from the year and write reflections about what they have learned and how they have seen growth in their writing skills. The week before the last day of class, each student gives a 3 minute presentation of their portfolio. I am always impressed with what the students say and how beautiful their portfolios are. It’s during these presentations that I tear up with joy and gratefulness for having had a part in their educational journeys.

Evan was one of the first students to give his presentation this year. He is fifteen years old, an avid football player, a drummer, and until now, would probably rather do math and science than writing. He did such a fine job with his speech that I wish we could have taped it. However, he did agree to let me post his text here for everyone to enjoy. Evan’s experience sums up what I hope every student experiences in Writing Foundations.

Hello my name is Evan, and this is my portfolio.

I have learned a lot in writing class this year about stories, narratives, summaries, and timed essays.

This year in regard to stories, I have learned how to develop characters and create a plot using short fables as a guide. I have also written a narrative by taking the story The Emperor’s New Clothes and rewriting it using my own words. I have learned how to write summaries by taking a portion of an informational book, maybe a short chapter, and picking out the bits of information that are relevant to the topic on which I am writing. And as far as timed essays go, I have learned how to structure a well-written essay and how to write in a persuasive manner.

But, at the beginning of the year before I had taken this writing class, I struggled greatly with writing. My mom had tried many different kinds of writing curricula, but they did not seem to help. The curricula never had me write about something meaningful; it was all just busy work. Often, it would have me write stories and narratives, but my stories and narratives were not very developed and well-written. Sometimes the assignment left it completely open saying, “You decide what you want to write.” The problem I had with that is that it did not give me any direction which left me feeling sort of lost and bewildered. And, before this class I had not even attempted writing a summary with a bibliography let alone a timed essay.

Now, since I have taken this Writing Foundations class, things have started falling into place. Using key word outlines, stylistic techniques, and WOW words have all helped me to grow as a writer. Because I have gone through this class and put to use the things that I have been taught, my stories and narratives that I wrote this year are much improved compared to my previous ones.

Here are some examples of how my technique as a writer has improved. Instead of the character in my story being in “danger”, he is now in “eminent danger”; and instead of a predator “flying down”, it is now “hungrily swooping down”. To show these examples in my work I will read to you my best short story.

Carried Away

One day, as a carefree rabbit was hopping through the forest, he stumbled upon his archenemy the fox. A thought dawned on the rabbit, and he decided to teach his archenemy a lesson. The rabbit boasted, “I bet that I am faster and more nimble than you. Just try and catch me!” With that, the rabbit dashed away with the fox in hot pursuit. The rabbit rapidly headed straight for a thorn patch. Because he was unaware of the eminent danger that awaited him, the fox was unable to decelerate in time, and he plunged headlong into the thorns while the rabbit made it through unscathed. Laughing all the way, the rabbit freely hopped away, leaving the fox in his unpleasant state. The rabbit was so overjoyed with his victory that he did not hear a great owl coming on silent wings. Hungrily, the owl swooped down and grasped the rabbit in his talons and carried him away, and the rabbit was seen no more.

In writing stories, narratives, summaries, and timed essays I have learned the basics of writing which will prepare me for writing in the future. Thank You.

Thank YOU, Evan. It’s been a pleasure to come alongside you and the others in your class this year!

a summary by Jonas, age 15, Writing Foundations Level 1

A special senate committee meticulously investigated the Watergate accusations and effectively revealed its origin. Determined to find the underlying cause of the felony, the impartial agency summoned witnesses from Nixon’s White House staff. Ira Peck, author of A Nation Grows, states that John Dean, a member of Nixon’s staff, candidly relayed information about his meeting with the head of Nixon’s election committee, John Mitchell. Explicitly, the witness announced that Mitchell, and several handsomely remunerated spies, set out to bug the Democratic offices. Dean implicated Nixon, stating that he knew about the cover up efforts and the conspiracy. If the statements Dean boldly and fervently claimed proved true, then President Nixon unlawfully aided in concealing a devious crime and willfully obstructed justice. Later, an anonymous witness revealed the existence of numerous recorded tapes of Mr. Nixon’s White House conversations (366). When the senate committee fervidly demanded that he yield the archival recordings, the President starkly refused to surrender the tapes. Nixon’s lawyers locked horns with the determined senate which spread talk of impeachment throughout America. Due to his refusal to hand over his recordings, Peck states, “Opinion polls showed that a majority of Americans distrusted their president”. Ira Peck concludes that the solicitous Nixon vacillated about whether to continue his term and risk the possibility of impeachment or resign (367). Thus, the tenacious senate committee’s investigations successfully uncovered the source of the Watergate scandal. Read the rest of this entry »

a fable spun from The Owl and The Grasshopper by Jonas, age 14, Writing Foundations Level 1

Over a series of many decades, Professor Fuddy Duddy created confusing grammar for English speaking nations. He dubbed the colossal term “Coordinating Conjunction” to tiny words such as and, but, for, nor, or, yet, and so. The wretched dictator also pointlessly called action words “verbs”, and gave numerous meanings and spellings to words that sound the same like to, too, and two. During his life time, he exhibited extreme intolerance for rebellious writers.

One bright and jaunty day, Mr. Fuddy Duddy’s vile thoughts drifted to where else he might insert a confounding exception to his myriad comma rules when his loyal minion rudely interrupted him with a report of a puerile author disobeying every one of his infamous English policies. His assistant relayed how other undergraduates admired this clever student’s simple rules, undermining Professor Duddy’s strict grammar regulations. The irascible scholar marched to the college that dared to house the defiant student. At the back door, the professor lay in wait for the blasphemous lad and soon spied the young rival meandering by. Gruffly, he seized his chance and grasped the brash learner by the collar demanding that he comply with his universal grammatical laws. The student retorted, “I refuse to follow your pointless perplexing policies.” He boastfully added, “With my limpid grammar techniques, the world won’t require your nit picky and confusing guidelines.” At this, Mr. Fuddy Duddy absconded to his fortress to plan the demise of the rebellious writer.

The following day, the evil professor conjured up an idea to rid the English language of the annoying graduate. Upon returning to the place of higher education, Professor Fuddy Duddy casually strolled up to the outlandish author and flattered the young novelist in hopes to gain his confidence. “I misjudged your academic talent,” remarked the sinister grammarian. “At my University of English Majors, I will gladly advocate your new grammatical short cuts.” The excited student appreciatively accepted the deceitful professor’s offer as the duo leisurely strolled to his “English” building. When the jubilant graduate entered the crafty critic’s castle, Mr. Fuddy Duddy’s goons snatched the novice and imprisoned him in an undisclosed location. As for the young writer’s work, Mr. Fuddy destroyed every last computer file and floppy disk that undermined his superior grammar edicts. To this day, Mr. Fuddy Duddy’s grammar system enslaves our world. We grieve the courageous young writer who had dared to defy him but failed.

by Rudy, age 16, Writing Foundations Level 2

Ulysses S. Grant was a celebrated war hero whose life involved a miraculous roller coaster of change. Initiating his military career at West Point, a prominent military academy, Grant completed his education in four years, entered the army, and became an officer (Southworth 218). An excellent horseman and an intrepid soldier, he inevitably worked his way up to the position of captain (McSpadden 41). However, he left the military to return to his farming roots because his army wages were inadequate (Southworth 220). Gradually spiraling toward worthlessness, Grant watched his pitiful life collapse as he hopped from job to job, eventually working as a clerk at his brothers’ store for fifty dollars a month (McSpadden 26). This meager existence melted into Grant’s past when Washington sent out a call for Union Army volunteers, and Grant re-entered the military leading one group of these volunteers (McSpadden 47). He proved his worth through many victories, including the battles of Vicksburg and Shiloh, and his superiors noticed these feats (Nisenson 72). Promoted to colonel, then brigadier general, and finally commanding the entire Union Army, Grant led the Union to victory over the Confederacy in the Civil War (Southworth 223). Reaching the top of the ladder of success, Lieutenant General Grant escaped the mediocrity of his post-Mexican War years and made a success of himself. Read the rest of this entry »

by Lacey, age 12, Online Writing Summaries 3

Elizabeth Zane was a brave young lady who helped save Fort Henry during the summer of 1777. Led by a vicious, blood thirsty man known as Simon Girty, the Indians attacked Fort Henry. Colonel Sheppard, the man in charge of the fort, sent out a group of men to ward off their enemies. They were savagely attacked and killed. This left only a handful of men to defend the defenseless, which were mostly old men, women and young children. They were in desperate need of more gunpowder which was outside the fort. Elizabeth Zane volunteered. She believed that as a woman the Indians would be less likely to attack her. Thus, two soldiers cautiously cracked the gates, just enough for Elizabeth to squeeze through. The Indians were stunned and stood motionless while they watched her walk swiftly across the field and into a house. Thinking she was surrendering as a hostage, they held their fire until she darted from the house with a barrel of gunpowder. Shots rained down on all sides of her, but she was not hit. Serendipitously, the supply of gunpowder held Fort Henry until reinforcements arrived. After the battle, a cheer rose up for Elizabeth as she shyly took her place next to Colonel Sheppard in the courtyard where she was applauded for her courage. To this day, people love to repeat Elizabeth Zane’s story of how she bravely risked her life to save Fort Henry and spared many lives.

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